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when a women recived text from her child passed away ten years ago ,she try to fined him to prove it is not illusion

when a women recived text from her child passed away ten years ago ,she try to fined him to prove it is not illusion
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    1. Best Answer
      Uberwriter

      So if the child hasn?t aged this is a supernatural thriller which makes the logline a little different.

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      Singularity

      She has to prove it is not only an illusion, but also that it is not a hoax, a cruel prank by someone who knew her son, a friend of the boy, or a relative.

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      Logliner

      But she saw her child when she was in the train and he was outside train Station with unknown girl and after the train started to go….?

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      Singularity

      I like the premise. It has an air of mystery, yet at the same time, has the potential for a lot of heart.

      I agree with Variable, and will add that it would greatly help if the scope of the challenge was made clear.

      For example, the movie Lion presented a slightly similar situation, boy wants to find his mum but at the same time, he had to look for her in India. With 1 billion people to search through the size of his task made his challenge clear and his obstacle huge.
      What would be the equivalent for this mother? Could the child have been lost, or presumed dead, in China?

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      Uberwriter

      Grammatical errors aside, you have stated the vehicle (text msgs) that are a different spin on the story (that’s good) but beyond that, what else? must the woman overcome to reunite with her child? Surely, she will not spend 2 hrs asking questions through texts?

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    6. Best Answer
      Uberwriter

      A woman receives a text from her child who died ten years earlier she must ….. to prove they are still alive.

      The …. is the story. Embark on a voyage, undertake an investigation, start a search with the help of her ex-lover. Whatever your story entails.

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      Uberwriter

      After receiving a text from her child, ten years after his death…[[a woman tries to find him/ her, to prove its not an illusion]]
      for the part in brackets..
      she wouldn’t find her child just to prove her sanity, but because it’s her child!

      Also the plot-verb resembles that one of a 2008 Eastwood film “changeling”

      Also, what’s stopping her?
      and if it is her child..why doesn’t (s)he just drop by-instead of texting her?
      If it isn’t, you should find a way around “text from her child” in the logline..

      “what’s stopping her…” MUST be a part of your logline..

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