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SonjaPenpusher
Posted: September 7, 20202020-09-07T22:46:00+10:00 2020-09-07T22:46:00+10:00In: Action

When a young grocery clerk who doesn’t give a fuck about most things, witnesses a kidnapping of a child, they have to resort to murder in order to save the young boy.

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    1. Odarka Penpusher
      2020-09-07T22:50:01+10:00Added an answer on September 7, 2020 at 10:50 pm

      Maybe rephrase “who doesn’t give a fuck about mot things” into a shorter sentence. Perhaps: When a young dispassionate clerk witnesses a kidnapping, he has to commit the ultimate crime of passion – murder – in order to save the young child.

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      • Sonja Penpusher
        2020-09-07T22:52:01+10:00Replied to answer on September 7, 2020 at 10:52 pm

        That is good feedback, thank you! 🙂

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