Clone
When a young man discovers that he is a clone of a dead scientist he wants to find out why the scientist cloned himself, while keeping the fact that he is a clone a secret and getting on with his life.
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The stakes are minimal. Unless we learn more from the logline, the knowledge why the scientist cloned himself doesn’t promise anything that will sustain a film.
Why would he want to keep it a secret? This is also an open-ended goal…
In MOON for instance, not the knowledge/realisation he is a clone provides the drama, but the fact that he wants to get out.
Find a clear goal that follows directly or indirectly from the inciting incident (the shock realisation).
It is very hard to read on a first take..
Remember to strip it down to the essentials then build from there:
After discovering he is a clone of a dead scientist, a (insert weakness)** (insert occupation)** journeys to find out why he was created while keeping the secret hidden from view…?
Is the weakness being nihilistic ??
What is he risking to get the information ??
How far is he willing to go to make it happen ??
What obstacles are standing in his way ??
What is the urgency facing our protagonist ??
Create a logline with as much uniqueness that helps the reader easily identify the premise // concept..
Happy writing 😀
Tor
Would be more interesting if being a clone is more than a curious circumstance; that is, it has consequences complications (health, sanity) that he has to deal with… or else.