When a young man washes-up dead in a desolate coastal town, his self-centred estranged mother must fight against apathy and hostility to uncover the truth, at the risk of exposing her own culpability.
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When a young man washes-up dead in a desolate coastal town, his self-centred estranged mother must fight against apathy and hostility to uncover the truth, at the risk of exposing her own culpability.
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>>>the reveal that the drowned man is the protagonist?s son comes at the inciting incident ? there?s mystery up until that point as to what relationship,
In the script , you can certainly open with nobody knowing the ID of the washed-up body.? For the purpose of a logline,? where economy of words is paramount (less is more, fewer is better),? it isn’t necessary.? Rather, it’s superfluous.?A logline begins with the inciting incident. — not with with happens before that plot beat.
So CraigDGriffiths lead off –” When her estranged son is found dead” — does the job.
If the mother is the MC best to re write the logline from her point of view.
After her son is killed, a self-centered woman must fight to…
What do you mean by her own culpability? Did she kill him? Did the son kill himself as a result of something she did?
Lastly, what apathy and hostility is she fighting?
Why the apathy and hostility? Is it her fault?
These need to be answered to set tone and logic.
?When her estranged son is found dead in her small coastal town she must she must… to get the cops to take interest even if it incriminates her?
As a result of the discovery of her son’s corpse what must she do which translates in
>>>fighting against apathy and hostility to uncover the truth, at the risk of exposing her own culpability
Also are you sure about a self-centred protagonist? How does it operate in your scheme?