When agents reporting for a covert mission are killed, a selfish pilot risks his life on a bold plan to destroy the enemy and save his crew.
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When agents reporting for a covert mission are killed, a selfish pilot risks his life on a bold plan to destroy the enemy and save his crew.
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If he’s selfish why would he risk his life for anyone else? ? ?The action he takes doesn’t logically or emotionally follow from his character flaw.
Rick Blaine in “Casablanca” initially asserts that “I stick my neck out for nobody.” ?Then Ilsa walks into his gin joint and…
So what triggers his change of character to go from being selfish to selfless?
Agreed with DPG – best to retain the nature of the character flaw throughout the story as an inner obstacle for the MC to overcome.
I’ll add that the premise sets the MC up for self-sacrifice, but the cause and effect connection is unclear.? How can the death of a few spies make the pilot NEED to save his crew? This may be a plotting issue, but it isn’t clear in the logline. Could be that one of the spies was a close relative or friend of his and the personal connection motivated him to take action.
Secondly, you state that he will destroy the enemy, do you mean the whole enemy army single handily? This is not plausible, perhaps you meant he singled out one enemy general or military unit as responsible for the killing.
“When his best friend is captured behind enemy lines, a disgraced pilot steals a fighter and flies into contested skies determined to save his buddy.”