When an African-American photographer gets trapped by his white girlfriend?s family who intent to steel his body he must break free in order to stop the family?s body-snatching business.

Since Chris is not trapped for most of the movie -or at least he doesn’t know that he is- I suggest you don’t use the “trapping” part in the logline.

The same applies to the “body snatching business,” which is revealed after Chris wakes up bound on the armchair. This is at the 75% mark, as far as I remember. In Sixth Sense you wouldn’t put “Bruce Willis’s character is dead” in the logline, nor would you reveal the wife-substituting business in Stepford Wives. You would spoil too much. Thus, I suppose you wouldn’t want to reveal the body snatching business, in this one, either.

This is why I find mystery thrillers tricky, when writing their loglines: you don’t want to reveal the Big Conspiracy, but neither do you want to resort to some generalisation like IMDb’s “where his simmering uneasiness about their reception of him eventually reaches a boiling point.”

A good question is “What is the first major event of the movie?” I think it is the meeting with Andr?, when he bleeds from the nose and tells him to “get out.” Before that, things were weird, alright, but not conspiracy-level weird.

How about:

When an African-American photographer meets his white girlfriend?s family, he must uncover the conspiracy behind their overstated adoration of the black race and the unnaturally “white-like” behaviour of the few African-Americans present or face a fate worse than death.

OK, a bit verbose and I, too, resort to a “fate worse than death” generalisation. What do you think?