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Posted: January 21, 20172017-01-21T21:25:41+10:00 2017-01-21T21:25:41+10:00In: Romance

When an agoraphobic author meets his dream girl, a country star, he starts a therapy to join her in public, but a meltdown on live TV reopens old wounds of his deceased love.

When an agoraphobic author meets his dream girl, a country star, he starts a therapy to join her in public, but a meltdown on live TV reopens old wounds of his deceased love.
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    1. Roberto Alto Logliner
      2017-08-28T14:27:22+10:00Added an answer on August 28, 2017 at 2:27 pm

      This is a bit cryptic. Why a television program, and what does this have to do with a fear of open spaces?

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2017-01-23T07:51:35+10:00Added an answer on January 23, 2017 at 7:51 am

      I think agoraphobia would be in interesting character vulnerability to explore.

      BUT:

      1]I still have trouble buying into the setup. ?As I mentioned earlier, in another thread, if she?s a pop star why would she resort to an online dating service to find a guy when her celebrity status would make it ?easy for her to ?hook up with any guy she wanted to in the off-line world?

      2] And “?meltdown on live TV reopens old wounds of his deceased love.” seems to be an unnecessary pile on of psychological issues. ?Agoraphobia by itself presents more than enough complications to their relationship. ?More than enough problems to flesh out a script.

      For example, ?his agoraphobia presents obstacles for her to overcome. ?As a hypothetical: ?suppose she’s a romantic who in the lyrics of the songs she sings, that love can conquer all. ?But in the real world, love can’t conquer a disorder like agoraphobia. ?Come to find out, ?her love for him isn’t going to magically “cure” him of his symptoms. ?Maybe in decades gone by a movie could get away with that kind of “and they lived happily ever after” FADE OUT but contemporary audiences are more sophisticated (and cynical?)

      So, in that hypothetical scenario, her character arc might be to learn acceptance: ?she realizes she’s going to have to learn to live with the bad as well as love the good about him, embrace his flaw as well as ?his virtues.

      I suggest you explore in your brainstorming all the ways his agoraphobia threatens to defeat the relationship and build a plot according. ?As I said, I think there are more than enough dramatic problems, hence possibilities for a plot, in his character vulnerability. ?I see no need to pile on with an ghost from the past” issue which in this case seems totally unrelated to his agoraphobia. ?I suggest the KISS (Keep It Simple Screenwriter) principle applies: to wit, define and focus the logline (and script) on ?the central problem in the drama, his agoraphobia.

      fwiw

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    3. dpg Singularity
      2017-01-22T08:56:17+10:00Added an answer on January 22, 2017 at 8:56 am

      >>>but a meltdown on live TV reopens old wounds of his deceased love.

      Extraneous to the purpose of a logline. ?It’s not the inciting incident; it’s a middle (or later) 2nd act complication or reversal. Loglines require a statement of the 2nd act objective goal; they don’t require a reveal of the major 2nd act complication/reversal of fortune.

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