When an alcoholic son discovers his father gets occasionally possessed by a harmful evil spirit, he must protect his family from danger that threatens them and then find a way to stop it for good.
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When an alcoholic son discovers his father gets occasionally possessed by a harmful evil spirit, he must protect his family from danger that threatens them and then find a way to stop it for good.
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The order of the descriptions is wrong – he must stop it for good in order to protect his family…
I suggest you describe the possession of the father as a definitive event instead of an arbitrary one.
Here is my try:
After a father becomes possessed, his alcoholic son recruits a priest to help stop the evil spirit for good in order to save his family.
You don’t need to say ‘son’ if you mention ‘his father’
“When an alcoholic discovers his father…”
Also Nir’s logline attempt is solid.
Not much to add over the above great points except, being an alcoholic isn’t much of a hurdle to temporarily overcome during this event. I mean, just stop drinking until the spirit is dealt with then party on.
I suggest adding a conflict which makes it difficult for the son to kick the alcohol habit.