Logliner
Posted: 2013-08-04T13:37:02+10:00 In:

When an earnest, hardworking nineteen year old unknowingly sets up the murder of a childhood friend gone astray, he unwittingly becomes entangled in the unglamorous world of low-level organized crime.

Sydney?is King (Crime/Drama)

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    5 Reviews

    1. Logliner

      this is great

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    2. Samurai

      Then what? What happens in your film? All you’ve given us is a logline. (Although, the idea of an earnest hardworking 19 year old getting sucked into organised crime is at least the irony that you need to keep a logline afloat).

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    3. Logliner

      Thanks Nicolas but I’m a bit confused about “all you’ve given us is a logline” when this is all it intended to be. Was there anything here that would have liked to have added perhaps concerning the structure of it?

      Cheers.

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    4. Samurai

      Sorry – my fault entirely. Should have proof read. What I meant to write is that all you’ve given us is the inciting incident. The set up.

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    5. Logliner

      Ah no worries!

      I guess I just don’t want it to be too wordy because I know I can keep going on and on and on so it seems that I’m good at set ups as everyone has told me! I just have to finish through with the driving points, the goals, the obstacles and the antagonist.

      Feel like I’m getting there and the feedback I’ve been getting is shaping my loglines greatly.

      Cheers and God bless, bud!

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