Inception
R JPenpusher
When an exiled dream thief struggling with his guilt over the death of his wife receives an opportunity to return to his children he must plant an idea in someone else's mind undetected despite the risk of becoming trapped in limbo and the recurring danger of his own subconscious.
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I personally think it is a very good logline, but probable too long. Try to keep it short as best as you can. The people don’t like reading that much, so try one more time.
I really love this logline. Great work, Rory.
The only thing I would tweak is punctuation. Throw in a few commas:
“When an exiled dream thief struggling with his guilt over the death of his wife receives an opportunity to return to his children, he must plant an idea in someone else’s mind undetected, despite the risk of becoming trapped in limbo and the recurring danger of his own subconscious.
Keep ’em coming!