When her billionaire grandfather refuses to pay her ransom, heiress Billie Ross recruits her kidnapper to rob the family?s casino
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When her billionaire grandfather refuses to pay her ransom, heiress Billie Ross recruits her kidnapper to rob the family?s casino
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I’ve taken a look at all your posted pitches. ?And as I noted before, each has a clear cool premise. ?And each lacks the conflict. ?I note this here as this one is the closest to having conflict. ?Tightwad Grandfather, doesn’t want to give up his money, even to ransom his granddaughter, so she has to convince her kidnappers to help her rob the man to get the money. ?The kidnappers aren’t going to want to do that. ?And the Grand dad isn’t going to want to get robed.
In this instance, as with the rest, I would suggest you add in or clarify what the conflict is in the story.
You’ve obviously put effort into these. ?And they work. ?My advice is simply to take them to the next level.
This concept is very similar to Ruthless People, only instead of a husband refusing to pay it’s a grandfather, I’m not sure how you’ll be able to create?enough of a difference to call this an original concept but that’s a different matter.
As with many of your other posts, it seems as if the basic recommended construct of a logline is not being observed. I suggest you consult with the Training tab on the top bar for further information, but in the meantime here are a few points.
No need to name the main character unless it is a biopic or historic genre.
If the inciting incident is the refusal to pay the ransom, robing the family casino is not a logical goal. There is little cause and effect between the two, except for greed, that logically motivates her to need to rob the casino as a result of the refusal. I suggest further developing the plot and coming up with a few other options?for the main character to pursue. Think what else could she possibly do that will come about as a result of her inciting incident.
Secondly, could the kidnapping be the inciting incident instead of the refusal to pay the ransom? Unless she planned the kidnaping it’s a far greater event than the grandfather refusing to pay the ransom.
I don’t think you understand the nature of my comment, the intention was to point?you in another direction; if a women gets kidnapped, what else can she do other than stealing from her grandfather as appose to her current goal?
It’s just a question aimed at broadening the thinking to help you separate this concept from another film of the same premise, yet still deal with similar subject matter.