When her pack is stolen, a spirited Corinthian girl must reclaim it from thieves and the important letter within which she promised to deliver to Rome. (Possible script title: ‘Phoebe’)

Must reclaim it or else? ?What are the stakes? ? What happens if she fails?

And in what time period is the story set?

Richiev:

I suggest you consider working into the logline the religious/historical import of the letter because it’s the story hook. ?What’s at stake is the fate of an epistle from an apostle named Paul, that formulates fundamental doctrines of the early Christian faith and is destined to be one of the most critical books in the New Testament. ?It’s ?what makes the story significant, what makes the script stand out from the crowd, the mob of other scripts clamoring to be read.

There’s a market (in the U.S.) for stories with a religious aspect and producers looking for them. ?How are they going to find this script if ?the hook is hidden? ?

fwiw

Except the target audience of the epistle was the Christians (Jews & Gentiles) in Rome, not the Emperor. ?This points to a ?dramatic?issue.

The long term stakes and consequences of the epistle ( its central role in formulating ?doctrine for the survival of the nascent Christian religion) is something ?the movie audience might appreciate. ??But within the time framework of the film, what are the immediate stakes for the early Christians in Rome? ?What’s the upside for them if the epistle is delivered, the downside if it isn’t?