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thedarkhorseSamurai
Posted: December 8, 20192019-12-08T01:40:06+10:00 2019-12-08T01:40:06+10:00In: Comedy

When his former ?friends? from his shameful prison past visit him and don?t leave, a family man sets about getting them all back into the dating game – which threatens his own marriage in the process.

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    1. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2019-12-09T21:13:45+10:00Added an answer on December 9, 2019 at 9:13 pm

      I like this idea.

      I think you have a good collection of characters although, for an Alexander Payne style of thing, I’m not sure I would bother with the sheriff. This is just my personal preference. It’s a bit cliche in this kinda thing and makes it feel a little cartoony or too comedic. This should be about them all looking forward without being able to look past their past. Maybe the only people who are actually really bothered about their criminal past are themselves and this is their internal journey?

      What I really wouldn’t want to see, is them turning back to crime at any point.

      What does the protagonist learn? What’s his arc? These three need to teach our protagonist (and potentially his wife too) something about love. I’m wondering if, thinking out loud, these three ex-cons all have different relationships that need fixing. Malkovich wants a girlfriend, Woods needs his relationship with his daughter fixing, and Liotta needs to reconcile with his wife? There’s a lot of life lessons there and, in my head, it’s more interesting that they’re all different aspects of love.

      The John Malkovich type – he’s brilliant with women… so what does our protagonist have to do?

      I wonder if the David Hyde Pierce character should actually be someone who our protagonist aspires to be rather than him wanting to be one of the guys. This gives our hero the “looking forward” perspective – the aspirational contrast to the blast from the past he gets from his prison buddies. As this is the B-Story for our protagonist, the Act II climax could be the discovery that his neighbour also has a hidden criminal past or something? Throwing stuff out there.

      Have you seen “Silver Linings Playbook”? I see this having some similarities with that film.

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    2. thedarkhorse Samurai
      2019-12-08T01:50:48+10:00Added an answer on December 8, 2019 at 1:50 am

      I had this idea a few years ago.

      It could be a film or TV show.

      Title: Lonely Hearts Club.

      I imagined Kevin Bacon as the everyman family man, the kind of guy who always needs a project or something to fix. Salt-of-the-earth. Midwest type. A rock of stability. However, he’s got a hellraiser past. Give him a beer and he’s the leader of the pack and worse than any of them.

      Anyways, his kids are off to college and suddenly the house is filled with his old prison “buddies” who he has long outgrown…

      The buddies:

      John Malkovich-type. The eccentric, psychotic, weirdo. Yet he’s oddly philosophical and incredibly intelligent. He is to everyone’s surprise – brilliant with women.

      James Woods-type. The over-caffeinated salesman loser. He’s missing a thumb and he’s banned from Vegas. His daughter refuses to speak to him. Also, he hates the guy his daughter is dating (who is exactly a young him/an avatar of a young him.)

      Ray Liotta-type. A bruiser with a sensitive side and a threat to our hero’s marriage when he gets closer to the wife. (However, he’s secretly homosexual.) He might be a low-level gangster.

      They are all in their own needy and use the hero as a crutch.?

      Though the premise comes across as “You, Me and Dupree”. I wanted to do something more in the vein of Alexander Payne. It’s melancholic. It’s grown-up. It’s about middle-age. More a dramedy. But yeah – there’s zany elements. Think of the guys in “Sideways”.

      Anyways… What do you think?

      Oh and Diane Lane/Elisabeth Shue as the lovely long suffering wife? And Michael Biehn as the eye-patched town sheriff whose got his “good” eye on these “weirdos”.

      And David Hyde Pierce as the next-door-neighbour doctor who desperately wants to be one of the guys.

      ?

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