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Alan SmitheePenpusher
Posted: July 1, 20202020-07-01T15:18:03+10:00 2020-07-01T15:18:03+10:00In: Student Loglines

When looters attack their home, a blind mother suffering paranoia from being unable to see must escape from the danger with her family.

When looters attack their home, a blind mother suffering paranoia from being unable to see must escape from the danger with her family.
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    1. CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter
      2020-07-02T12:42:47+10:00Added an answer on July 2, 2020 at 12:42 pm

      Blind and paranoia is an obvious thing. Being visually impaired doesn’t normally cause mental illness. Paranoia isn’t also an issue. She is being attacked. She is right to feel people are out to get her.

      Looters attacking her home? That may be a momentary problem. You may want to find a different way of bringing a threat to the woman. But I do like it. I once had an escaped prison enter a woman’s home during a mega storm and she was forced to help him escape.

      Her family? Kids? Husband? Why is it on her to lead? We need that here as well.

      When a blind woman is trapped in her house by riots, she is forced to flee with her children when looters attack her home.

      We could up the stakes a little.

      When a blind woman is trapped in her house by riots, she is forced to flee with her children when looters attack her home in a violent rampage.

      There are some good bones here.

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