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Posted: 2018-10-15T03:04:39+10:00 In:

When she begins dating a man twenty years her senior, an idealist teen must convince her overprotective parents he?s Mr. Right after they objected to his presence at a family dinner.

When she begins dating a man twenty years her senior, an idealist teen must convince her overprotective parents he?s Mr. Right after they objected to his presence at a family dinner.
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    1. Singularity

      >>>>convince her overprotective parents he?s Mr. Right after he?s wrongfully accused

      Uh, wouldn’t her objective goal be to convince a judge and jury that he’s innocent of the charges?

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    2. Singularity

      You added an element that completely changes the story.

      In your last attempt, the issue was the age difference between her and her boyfriend, now, in this attempt, the issue is not that he is older but that he is perceived to be a trafficker.

      This change will mean the whole logline must be changed around that element.

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