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Posted: 2016-03-14T16:07:05+10:00 In:

When the Devil steals the Grim Reaper’s power source, her scythe, releasing the undead on the earth, Death must reunite with her estranged brothers, regain her powers and stop the Apocalypse.

When the Devil steals the Grim Reaper’s power source, her scythe, releasing the undead on the earth, Death must reunite with her estranged brothers, regain her powers and stop the Apocalypse.
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    1. Mentor

      Hello, I had to look on the dictionary for grim reaper and schythe but I’m not english native so I suppose it’s just me.
      I like the concept! I like death being the main character. I’m wondering if you can’t find a better opponent than the devil, a more original one.
      The only thing that is really weak in the logline is the “estranged brother”, absolutely no cleus about who he may be! I think that the logline would be more powerful if you give a detail about that – this would clarify the plot. Finally, what does exaclty the death must do to stop the apocalipse?

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    2. Singularity

      It seems to me that the logline sets up a complicated scenario that requires a logline reader (and movie audience) to suspend disbelief on too many plot elements. ?It raises too many questions –in my mind, anyway — that require an explanation to believe the premise.

      1] A devil who can — and wants to ?– steal the scythe. (Say what?? The grim reaper isn’t an employee of the Devil? ?It may come as a divine revelation to some that the grim reaper is an independent operator.)
      2] A grim reaper who has brothers. (??? ?Another divine revelation that needs to be explained.)
      3]”Undead” (Zombies? ?If not, what kind of undead?)
      4]An Apocalypse. ?(Literally or metaphorically? ?And how? What’s the cause-and- effect relationship between stealing the scythe and?the Apocalypse.)

      The, uh, devil is in the details. And there are too many for me. ?Other’s mileage may differ.

      fwiw

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    3. Logliner

      I am assuming that Death and the Grim Reaper are the same person? It feels a little unclear. I agree that the devil is a little too (easy? ). Try picking a specific one …….Maybe Lucifer or one of the minions. ?I can see the connection between loosing the scythe and the Apocalypse…….lots of dead people roaming the streets would certainly look like the Apocalypse. I like the concept.
      Estranged brother…….what about him will help the quest? Is he a fallen angel? Need more drama. ? ?:)

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