When he?s enslaved by aliens, a New York mob boss must rally his fellow prisoners, take over the spaceship and teach his captors; even in space, the mob rules.
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When he?s enslaved by aliens, a New York mob boss must rally his fellow prisoners, take over the spaceship and teach his captors; even in space, the mob rules.
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Cut to the chase:? the mob boss’s objective goal is to escape back to earth.
And why would an audience want to root for a violent mob boss?? Maybe his abduction is cosmic karma, payback, for all his crimes on earth.
>>> break out and rescue his crew
Were they abducted too? That’s not made clear in the logline so might be worth clarifying.
>>>The mobsters are from 1930s Chicago
So this film is set in the 1930s? I’d maybe include that too as that sets the scene. Without that the reader could assume it was a modern day gangster film which would feel very different to this. Tony Soprano isn’t a 1930s gangster…?
Why have they abducted this guy? On a galactic black market (where gangsters are high value items) surely Al Capone would fetch a much higher price? Do the aliens imitate 1930s gangsters?
I like the premise I just think certain elements need clearing up. I think the idea of a 1930s gangster movie in space could work well, particularly as a comedy – I’m seeing aliens with galactic Tommy guns. I kinda feel like the aliens have to admire Earth’s gangsters or something – there has to be a connection between them. I’m thinking of Galaxy Quest – the aliens believe that the TV show is real and that’s why they abduct the stars because they need the hero they believe Tim Allen (et al) is. In this I feel like it would work better if the reason why he’s abducted was clarified.
As dpg said, the goal could be shortened to just getting back home to Earth – the rest would be implied if he was imprisoned on their ship.
>>>It?s also a comedy because they are the stereotypical gangsters of that time. What would have worked for describing him?
I suggest reclassifying it as a comedy because it more accurately conveys the sensibility.
What kind of black market is he to be sold on?? A violent gangster is going to be temperamentally unfit to submit to servitude as a slave.? Of all the people that could be abducted, why would aliens abduct him?
“When he’s enslaved by aliens, a New York mob boss must rally his fellow prisoners, take over the spaceship and teach his captors; even in space, the mob rules.”
This reads well but needs a bit of polish.
After he’s abducted by alien gangsters, a 1930’s liquor smuggler must rally all the other abductees to break out and get back to Earth.