20,000 B.C.E. An alien race has taught Homo Sapiens how to speak and uses religion to divide the tribes of men and control their perspective on existence. But Bero, a human teenager, comes upon the true story behind these heavenly masters and is thrust into a journey that will change the course of man’s future on earth.
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When tragedy befalls a prehistoric teen, he must join forces with a mysterious ally to unite humanity and overcome an extraterrestrial threat that could end all life on earth.
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The explanation is more interesting than the logline. That’s where the story hook seems to lie. In BCE, an alien race has “domesticated” feral homo sapiens like humans domesticated dogs from wolves.
And for what nefarious purpose? I mean, if dogs aren’t complaining, got a good deal out of the the arrangement, why *must* homo sapiens rebel?
And tragedy is a vague term. It could refer to any number of unhappy events. And in a logline, a word that could refer to any number of things means nothing at all.
Be specific.
“When he discovers that the gods are actually advanced beings from another world, a prehistoric warrior begins a quest to free mankind from their alien overlords.”