When two losers, tempted by the promise of money, get mixed up in the love triangle of two witches, they will need all their wits to get out of the mess.
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When two losers, tempted by the promise of money, get mixed up in the love triangle of two witches, they will need all their wits to get out of the mess.
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This sounds more like a comedy than action.
Lose two losers. That would only work in comedy.
Looking to get rich quick, two down on their luck men match wits with a vengeful witch that… (what do they need to get away from?)
Agree with foxtrot25, it reads more like a comedy than a thriller. ?And lose the losers description. ?Although in every aspect of the logline, they act like losers, victims of their own folly, which again, ?usually works better as a comedy.
And it’s not good enough to say “they will need all their wits to get out of the mess” ?because that is standard operating procedure in every plot line: ?complications and crises build to the point that it requires all the wits, courage and strength the character has to extricated himself from the dramatic predicament and prevail.
As a result of getting mixed up with 2 witches, what becomes their objective goal? ?And what’s at stake? ?What’s the worst thing that will happen to them if they “don’t get out of the mess”?