A Bounty Hunter in search for a wanted man, finds more than he bargained for.

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CraigDGriffiths · Showrunner · 12,600 pts

Put yourself in a producer's shoes. Is this story $500 or $5,000,000.

I know everyone has said this. You have a bounty hunter and nothing else in the logline.

Richiev · Legend · 58,825 pts

btw, After reading your logline I saw that is was categorized as a 'western', had I not read the category, I would never have known that the story took place in the old west.

You might want to add a detail like, Dodge city, or six-shooter, into your logline in order to let a reader know from the logline itself that it takes place in the old west.

An easy fix.

Richiev · Legend · 58,825 pts

This is way too vague to hook a reader.

"A bounty hunter in search of a wanted man" is exactly what all bounty hunters do, so you are describing every single bounty hunter in the world, nothing sticks out about this character.

"Finds more than he bargained for..." again, this could be a hundred dollar bill on the street or a great new place to drink coffee, or his long lost father.

So if you want the logline to hook the reader, I would add a few specifics and it will help your logline greatly.