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Agree with the above comments. Shorten to one sentence that is 35-40 words. Answer who has what illness. Emphasis what will happen if the con doesn't work out. What is the conflict? And what is in jeopardy?
I am sure there is a great story here but for me it is not coming through totally clear yet two things struck me, i was not sure whose illness it was, the landlord or the ex-con and for some reason i had to read it a couple of times to understand it,
Could you shorten to one sentence and define the illness and who has it.
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