Four friends, who are all about to go through some life changing experiences. The Brotherhood is about to become The Fatherhood. And it isn’t going to be easy

I've had a stab at a couple of revisions - would love to get your feedback...

Charles?needs to rebuild his relationship with his son. Michael needs to stop Zoe?from having their baby, whilst Andrew?needs to get Rachael?pregnant. And Jason?has a secret that is going to shock everyone. The brotherhood is about to become the Fatherhood. And its likely there will be some casualties along the way.

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Four friends navigate the intricacies of their relationships as one struggles with fertility and another is about to become a father through a one night stand. The brotherhood is about to become the Fatherhood, but its likely there will be some casualties along the way.

Thank you so much for your input - its been very helpful :)
Now I'm off to revise!!!

This describes a situation not a plot.

The next draft of the logline neds to answer the following:
Who needs to achieve what and why?

Hope this helps.