When a gigantic firestorm burns through a family’s horse ranch in October 2003, the miracles it leaves behind bring Grant, an accomplished physicist, to the brink of believing in something more powerful than science.

Yes, I've done what you advised and written it for its most important audience—producers. Thanks for your well-reasoned advice. THE MAGIC APPLES is now entered in the ScreenCraft Drama Competition, the Los Angeles International Screenplay Awards, and Launch Pad's Feature Competition for 2020. You may read and critique my work for free on Coverfly X Peer Notes. Please feel free to do so, everyone. This story is based on true miraculous events during the Cedar Fire of 2003, and you will not be bored—I promise.

I agree with CraigDGriffiths.

Particularly on the point that if a logline isn't clear and concise as to what the project is about, it's DOA. No one will give it a second thought.

My fellow logliners will disagree. But tell them the story. My brother had read the lord of the rings every year since he was 13. At 45 we went to a midnight screen on day one. Producers don’t need intrigue. They need to be able to make a decision. They are not the audience, they are your future collaborators.

They also do not see your logline in isolation. They have 1000 to review. So one that isn’t clear what the movie is about, is not given a second thought. This is my belief and approach to the world. Like I said, my fellow logliners will disagree.

So what have we got.

A kid falling from a tree, magic apples deposited by a firestorm and potentially a person that doesn’t pick up on clues.

What is the genre, budget, lead character, era... I don’t have enough to make a decision.

I hope my rant helps.