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Needs work Causality and coherence Concision
About half the logline (27 out of 52 words) is devoted to the inciting incident and a character who, if I understand the logline correctly, is not the protagonist. But who seems to be a more interesting character than the designated protagonist, the publicity-hungry mayor.
Who has the starring role, the felon or the mayor?
And there is no clue as to how the mayor intends to overcome the dramatic problem, that there is "no cover and no sun".