When a publicity-hungry mayor hires a recently released felon—imprisoned for secretly giving luxury vacations to families who couldn’t afford them—to run tourism for his failing Florida town, Matt Stevens must turn Sunny Cove into a destination people actually want to visit, despite one glaring problem: there is no cove and no sun.

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Normally (unless it is a biopic) you wouldn't use the name of a character, but rather something about their character flaw and occupation. "...a former hitman, still mourningn the loss of his beloved wife, is drawn back into..." John Wick.

Want to more about who the protagonist is and internal goal.
But worth developing for sure.

Needs work Causality and coherence Concision

About half the logline (27 out of 52 words) is devoted to the inciting incident and a character who, if I understand the logline correctly, is not the protagonist. But who seems to be a more interesting character than the designated protagonist, the publicity-hungry mayor.

Who has the starring role, the felon or the mayor?

And there is no clue as to how the mayor intends to overcome the dramatic problem, that there is "no cover and no sun".

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