When a reclusive, secretly psychic troubleshooter is threatened to do a job, or loose it, she and her ghostly toy T.Rex sidekick head to Berlin. When she “sees” the rail road company’s problem involves thiefs and Nazi’s, fixing this problem becomes a mission. I am sooo not done with this logline yet ( it is too long) but would love to hear your opinion on it. Greetings Mack I have put it in the superhero section because she has secret “powers”and fights evil (Nazi’s) with it.

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Thank you for your answer Nor Shelter!

After dpg's advice ,I put the jail threat in to boost? the inciting incident, give it more weight.
So the blackmail/threat of jail is the inciting incident.
The staying out of jail is the goal.? Is that not compelling enough?
The hermit going to Berlin + having to solve the Nazi puzzle are her? hurdles to take to get there.

In the script:
She is secretly spychic. (put in a mental intitution by her devout parents as a child , who believed she was under the devils spell. So not trusting of people ) Should she have to choose to come out of the closet to reach her goal? In the script she (as a secretly psychic and hermit) has to face people, the world and do this job in Berlin to keep her job and home (her sanctuary) (and possibly stay out of jail)

Agreed with the above notes.

The plot in the logline and subsequent revisions seems to lack focus. Normally this would be resolved with an inciting incident and a compelling goal, but the lack of these make the story come across as fragmented between her mental/emotional problems, job, and a 70 year old Nazi puzzle.

Which of these will be the 'A' plot - the main storyline in the film?