When her reclusive father dies without a will, his washed-up rodeo queen daughter must gather her estranged siblings in order to settle his estate.

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17 reviews

Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

It's still not clear what specifically they need to do. What is their goal and what will their main action be?

"...they have one shot of avoiding foreclosure," - what does this mean in practical terms?

Also, "...changing their dubious reputations..." is vague and seems redundant to the plot - you can simply cut it.

LucindaFarnsworth · Penpusher · 120 pts

Maybe this one drills down a bit more:

When a former rodeo queen and her ex-con?brother inherit their father's struggling farm,?they have one shot of avoiding foreclosure, and changing their dubious reputations for the better.


LucindaFarnsworth · Penpusher · 120 pts

I like it. What about this:

When a former rodeo queen and her ex-con?brother inherit their father's struggling farm, they have one?chance to make it a success, ?and one to?turn around their failed lives.