When the leader of the Assassination Cartel’s grandson is killed during a raid authorized by the American President, the semi-retired leader invokes an ancient vengeance that will wipe out the president’s seed from the earth

I think the new version is better.

Hi Craig,
What do you think of this version of the logline?

Hi Craig,
What do you think of this version of the logline.

Hello Rich,
What do you think of this version?

Thanks Rich for your comments. I will keep working on it using your feedback.
Wishing you and your family a very Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays!
Cheers.

Thanks Craig for your comments. I will keep working on it using the feedback from you and Rich.
Wishing you and your family a very Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays!
Cheers.