1. Posted: June 10, 2012In:

    A unpredictable woman wanders into the live of an unconventional and disillusioned psychiatrist, by giving up her identity she start them off on a profound journey to comprehend the meaning of her live. With his help she finds her answers and leaves him with his own questions.

    Aimeedis

    A new rewrite: An unpredictable woman, gives up her identity and wanders into the life of a disillusioned psychiatrist. Her questions starts them off on a profound journey to comprehend the meaning of life.

    A new rewrite:

    An unpredictable woman, gives up her identity and wanders into the life of a disillusioned psychiatrist. Her questions starts them off on a profound journey to comprehend the meaning of life.

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  2. Posted: June 10, 2012In:

    A unpredictable woman wanders into the live of an unconventional and disillusioned psychiatrist, by giving up her identity she start them off on a profound journey to comprehend the meaning of her live. With his help she finds her answers and leaves him with his own questions.

    Aimeedis

    Sorry, I did pick up on those while rewriting? again. Being Dutch living in France you could say English is my second language, ?

    Sorry, I did pick up on those while rewriting? again.
    Being Dutch living in France you could say English is my second language, ?

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  3. Posted: June 8, 2012In:

    Shaming his family whilst alive is nothing compared to what they have to overcome now that Lee's dead and unwed.

    Aimeedis

    maybe you should say something about why this being unwed is a problem. Is there a kid? What is the nature of the problems the family has to deal with, emotional, material, technical?

    maybe you should say something about why this being unwed is a problem. Is there a kid? What is the nature of the problems the family has to deal with, emotional, material, technical?

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