1. Posted: August 22, 2012In:

    When the son of a billionaire couple is kidnapped during their messy divorce, the ransom is an ultimatum: one parent will get to take their son home – the other must die.

    alexiadark

    Thanks for the feedback! What do the kidnappers get out of it? That's a major spoiler, but it is both money-related and very personal. Each parent is told separately about their 'deal' with the kidnapper - so as they try to kill each other, they both think that the other one set the whole thing up.Read more

    Thanks for the feedback! What do the kidnappers get out of it? That’s a major spoiler, but it is both money-related and very personal. Each parent is told separately about their ‘deal’ with the kidnapper – so as they try to kill each other, they both think that the other one set the whole thing up.

    The title is definitely temporary, just a placeholder.

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  2. Posted: July 16, 2012In:

    An unforseen event triggers a middle class Indian girl to relive every moment of her relationship with a woman who was socially of another class ? her maid, in order to find meaning in her relationship with her blood family.

    alexiadark

    What "unforeseen event"? Given that it appears to be the inciting incident, there's no need to be so vague. How does this incident involve the maid? "When (incident involving the maid happens), she must (action she takes), reexamining the strict Indian caste system, her past relationships, and her oRead more

    What “unforeseen event”? Given that it appears to be the inciting incident, there’s no need to be so vague. How does this incident involve the maid? “When (incident involving the maid happens), she must (action she takes), reexamining the strict Indian caste system, her past relationships, and her own beliefs in order to find her place within her own family” might be an option to consider.

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