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When a Fire-Demon from his parents past kidnaps his fianc?, a timid hydrologist must locate a mythical artefact and uncover its power before the Devil kills his lover and unborn child.
Structurally, you've got a lot of interesting pieces here with high stakes and irony. I'd lead with the main character and his flaw, then his problem, then what he's going to do about it. In terms of story, I feel like the world's chock full of mythical artefacts to save the day. Can I make the suggRead more
Structurally, you’ve got a lot of interesting pieces here with high stakes and irony. I’d lead with the main character and his flaw, then his problem, then what he’s going to do about it.
In terms of story, I feel like the world’s chock full of mythical artefacts to save the day. Can I make the suggestion that instead of finding some ancient being’s Sceptre of Highly Specific Use, he has to instead find the plans, then build the device? That could also be a complication in a story of finding the device but discovering it no longer functions. Also, making your antagonist’s weakness (water) your protagonist’s strength (hydrology) tips the scales a little too far in his favour and makes it an obvious win. If anything it should be the other way round, with the antagonist’s strength being your protagonist’s weakness, which he must then overcome to succeed.
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