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  1. Posted: July 17, 2021In: Family

    An aspiring teen screenwriter on the autism spectrum, battling discouragement from peers and writer’s block, is determined to write a blockbuster movie and submit it to a Hollywood screenwriting contest after she meets one of her original characters based on a dream she had one night — an intelligent robot cat.

    Alison Penpusher
    Added an answer on July 23, 2021 at 11:44 am

    I like the idea very much and find it could have the potential to be very amusing but agree with Mike. There needs to be more about what stops her apart from discouragement. Does she go on a journey with the cat? Does she need to enter the dreams more often in order to find out what happens? Maybe hRead more

    I like the idea very much and find it could have the potential to be very amusing but agree with Mike. There needs to be more about what stops her apart from discouragement. Does she go on a journey with the cat? Does she need to enter the dreams more often in order to find out what happens? Maybe have an actual competition deadline perhaps to give the ticking clock concept. What happens if she doesn’t succeed? What are the stakes? Maybe the cat is in danger depending on what she writes so the goal changes from the competition to saving the cat. (Haha – Blake would be proud.)

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  2. Posted: December 16, 2020In: Family

    A driven mum must rise above her own insecurities to prove her inter-racially adopted daughter loves her.

    Alison Penpusher
    Added an answer on December 16, 2020 at 9:49 pm

    So not to lose her daughter.

    So not to lose her daughter.

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  3. Posted: December 16, 2020In: Family

    A driven mum must rise above her own insecurities to prove her inter-racially adopted daughter loves her.

    Alison Penpusher
    Added an answer on December 16, 2020 at 9:48 pm

    Thank you Mike for your really insightful review. With the way you perceived it, I can see how it doesn’t tell my story at all. I’m seriously struggling with the hero’s desire. I was going along the desire line of Jane Eyre - to find love, but in this case, the love of a child. The mum’s ghost is thRead more

    Thank you Mike for your really insightful review. With the way you perceived it, I can see how it doesn’t tell my story at all. I’m seriously struggling with the hero’s desire.
    I was going along the desire line of Jane Eyre – to find love, but in this case, the love of a child.
    The mum’s ghost is that her parents were disappointed in every major decision she made and after having her own family, she’s turned out the same. Her teenage adopted child rebels but it isn’t because she’s adopted, it’s because the mum is disappointed in the decisions the daughter makes.
    But I like your “5 day road trip” or similar idea. This gives a desire line.

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