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When an intergalactic refugee crash-lands at his farm, a timid teenager must find the courage to protect the exile and himself from malicious space hunters.
This idea is for a short film, I appreciate the feedback. I will go over my notes and try for a better logline, cheers.
This idea is for a short film, I appreciate the feedback. I will go over my notes and try for a better logline, cheers.
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Thanks for the feedback, guys! :)
Thanks for the feedback, guys! 🙂
See lessWhen the apparent heir to the family business dies, the lesser brother, John, and the town?s local photo-journalist must prove himself to his family by covering the story fully until the investigation turns into a homocide with, Bill, the grandfather and owner of the business becoming their prime suspect.
Try to re-write the logline to 25-30 Words. No need to mention the names of the characters. (unless detrimental to the story) * Maybe look for a better?flaw than a lower birth right... ?e.g Anarchist, Loath etc be creative :) * Who's the main Protagonist? The lesser brother or the local photo-journaRead more
Try to re-write the logline to 25-30 Words. No need to mention the names of the characters. (unless detrimental to the story)
* Maybe look for a better?flaw than a lower birth right… ?e.g Anarchist, Loath etc be creative 🙂
* Who’s the main Protagonist? The lesser brother or the local photo-journalist? ?(If lesser brother, no need to mention the P.J)
* What does the P.J got to gain or loose from this? (if Joint Protag)
* Who’s the antagonist? Who is the trying to stop them? The Grandfather? The brother
* How does/ will covering the story prove his worth to the family???(A great conflict if he was rebelling against?his family, but that’s not how I have interpreted your logline)
I am no expert, just a few points that I have received in the past.
See lessBest of luck!