1. Posted: November 4, 2015In:

    Two young men with opposite lives from opposite sides of the world unwittingly exchange destinies as one encounters the other, and the other encounters a vision of God.

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    My problem with this logline is that I don't understand what do you mean with "exchange destinies". For me you need to explain that a little better. Like it is this logline doesn't make me interested to know the full story.

    My problem with this logline is that I don’t understand what do you mean with “exchange destinies”. For me you need to explain that a little better.

    Like it is this logline doesn’t make me interested to know the full story.

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  2. Posted: November 8, 2015In:

    A brilliant but daring high school senior creates a multi-million dollar video game by stealing the concept from a big-time CEO.

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    I'm a programmer so this is something very interesting to me. I like the concept. It's something that I'd be interested to watch.

    I’m a programmer so this is something very interesting to me.

    I like the concept. It’s something that I’d be interested to watch.

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  3. Posted: November 3, 2015In:

    In order to take care of her recently orphaned younger sister, a broke twentysomething decides to sleep around with married men with the intention of blackmailing them, lest she expose them for their infidelity.

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    I like the idea. It's an interesting concept. I agree with Paul Clarke about the last line to be unnecessary. But I actually think that the idea of her doing it to several men is more interesting. It evolves more risk this way. Ant it's something believable if she doesn't have access to a very richRead more

    I like the idea. It’s an interesting concept.

    I agree with Paul Clarke about the last line to be unnecessary.

    But I actually think that the idea of her doing it to several men is more interesting. It evolves more risk this way.

    Ant it’s something believable if she doesn’t have access to a very rich man. If she’s unemployed, for instance, she then won’t have a rich boss to blackmail. ?It’s just a matter of explaining throughout the film why she has to blackmail more than one guy. I don’t see a problem there.

    I’d suggest that the woman should be married and she and her husband love each other. This way she would be risking more and it could create more tension.

     

    For me the logline is good enough to get me curious to watch the film, so it works for me.

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