1. Posted: September 17, 2022In:

    After a road accident, a young malcontent finds himself legally bound to the whims of a narcissistic billionaire who aims to break him as a person.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Hallucigenia, How about this? "A rebellious young man finds himself legally bound to the whims of an egoistic billionaire who is out to make a point of breaking him." I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Hallucigenia,

    How about this?

    “A rebellious young man finds himself legally bound to the whims of an egoistic billionaire who is out to make a point of breaking him.”

    I hope this helps

    Good Luck

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  2. Posted: September 11, 2022In:

    An independent inventor develops the first faster-than-light drive to take humanity to the stars, usurping a solar system of greedy corporations and vengeful governments.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Hallucigenia, Here's how I understood the story so far based on your loglines: A man invents a faster-than-light vehicle to transport humans to the stars and becomes a commercial threat to the government-supported corporation that wants him out no matter how. I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Hallucigenia,

    Here’s how I understood the story so far based on your loglines:

    A man invents a faster-than-light vehicle to transport humans to the stars and becomes a commercial threat to the government-supported corporation that wants him out no matter how.

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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  3. Posted: September 12, 2022In:

    Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian, a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi meme, I cannot see the relation between the two sentences in your logline. You wrote: Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian, and a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears. The second part of your logline can be an indeRead more

    Hi meme,

    I cannot see the relation between the two sentences in your logline.
    You wrote:

    Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian,

    and

    a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears.

    The second part of your logline can be an independent logline by itself. Even if it needs more work:
    To conquer her fears, a teenager joins her school’s improv group.
    Use the above logline as a template and re-write if you think this logline serves the purpose.
    But I cannot see the significance of her strained relationship with her sole guardian.
    Can you clarify what do you exactly mean by “Navigating”?

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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