1. Posted: October 5, 2022In:

    Young siblings have to use their very particular set of skills to counter bullying and alienation they’re experiencing after moving to a new country.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi pinang, I like your logline as it is. I believe you can make it even more appealing though by playing with the words. For example: "To counter bullying and alienation in the new country they've just relocated to, young siblings must use their very particular set of skills." I hope this helps GoodRead more

    Hi pinang,

    I like your logline as it is. I believe you can make it even more appealing though by playing with the words.
    For example:

    “To counter bullying and alienation in the new country they’ve just relocated to, young siblings must use their very particular set of skills.”

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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  2. Posted: September 27, 2022In:

    A group of 20 somethings are thrown into the gauntlet of messy romance when feelings start to get real between co-workers and unlikely friends.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi zdoubs, Here's how I see your story based on your logline: Emotions start to get real between a group of young colleagues and acquaintances and they are thrown into the current of messy romance." I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi zdoubs,

    Here’s how I see your story based on your logline:

    Emotions start to get real between a group of young colleagues and acquaintances and they are thrown into the current of messy romance.”

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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  3. Posted: September 29, 2022In:

    A dysfunctional young man with a history of being unable to assimilate into normal society needs help in winning a local golf tournament and believes it comes from a talking golf ball.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Donn Curbow, This is how I see it: "To win a local golf tournament, a dysfunctional young man asks a talking golf ball to help him win a local golf tournament." I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Donn Curbow,

    This is how I see it:

    “To win a local golf tournament, a dysfunctional young man asks a talking golf ball to help him win a local golf tournament.”

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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