1. Posted: August 23, 2022In:

    Set during the Blitz, a pacifist Air Raid Warden fights to keep his community safe against the merciless Luftwaffe.

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    Hi WARRIN88 A pilot / air raid warden fights against the Luftwaffe / German air force during an air strike aimed to .......... OR A pilot / air raid warden guards his people by thwarting the merciless Luftwaffe / Germany's air force attempt to ............... by an airstrike. Use this as a templateRead more

    Hi WARRIN88

    A pilot / air raid warden fights against the Luftwaffe / German air force during an air strike aimed to ……….
    OR
    A pilot / air raid warden guards his people by thwarting the merciless Luftwaffe / Germany’s air force attempt to …………… by an airstrike.

    Use this as a template if you think I got your story right and re-write. I suggest using widely understood terms in your logline.

    I hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: August 22, 2022In:

    Two inquisitive friends get teleported into a roller coaster sim game and must complete an objective by satisfying a stern park inspector to get back home.

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    Hi RailGamm97, This is how I see it. Two friends who end up in a virtual reality park must complete an impossible task for a stern park inspector so he would allow/help them get back home. If so, use this as a template and re-write. Good luck. I hope this helps

    Hi RailGamm97,

    This is how I see it.

    Two friends who end up in a virtual reality park must complete an impossible task for a stern park inspector so he would allow/help them get back home.

    If so, use this as a template and re-write. Good luck.

    I hope this helps

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  3. Posted: August 21, 2022In:

    1861, Camargue, France. A young orphan Provencal is shanghaied by a rogue Confederate ship on its maiden voyage out of England and journeys into the US Civil War running a cargo of guns through the Union blockade known as the “Anaconda.”

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    Hi markferland, Congratulations on your first script and first logline. Since you are writing your first script and this is your first logline, I strongly recommend: 1- Clicking on the 'Formula' icon at the top of this page. Study the contents 2- Re-write using widely understood terms 3- Use correctRead more

    Hi markferland,
    Congratulations on your first script and first logline. Since you are writing your first script and this is your first logline, I strongly recommend:
    1- Clicking on the ‘Formula’ icon at the top of this page. Study the contents
    2- Re-write using widely understood terms
    3- Use correct grammar and check your spelling before posting.

    I wish you good luck and hope to see more of your loglines

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