1. Posted: September 15, 2012In:

    14 year old Glitch, and Komako, the talking deer, must travel through a maze of unnerving, yet beautiful, interconnecting television worlds, in search of the one that resides in the human land, so Glitch can return home.

    brookeschook

    Good advice, thanks! It's interesting that you took the deer as the main character. I hadn't really considered that, I like it. It's an interactive animation series for an ipad. I've written a script for ep.1, but it's still a working progress! Thanks for the feedback :)

    Good advice, thanks! It’s interesting that you took the deer as the main character. I hadn’t really considered that, I like it.

    It’s an interactive animation series for an ipad. I’ve written a script for ep.1, but it’s still a working progress!

    Thanks for the feedback 🙂

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  2. Posted: September 14, 2012In:

    When a timid janitor?s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact and uncover its power before the devil kills his lover and unborn child

    brookeschook

    I like this logline, it's direct and powerful. The only thing I'm left wondering if what the link is between the fire demon and the fact that the guy is a janitor. But other than that, nice work! :)

    I like this logline, it’s direct and powerful. The only thing I’m left wondering if what the link is between the fire demon and the fact that the guy is a janitor. But other than that, nice work! 🙂

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  3. Posted: September 15, 2012In:

    Two teens from rival families fall in love… it doesn't go well.

    brookeschook

    While I very much like the drama of this statement, it leaves me feeling like I want a bit more information. Who are these teens? Why are their families rivals? Why doesn't it go well?

    While I very much like the drama of this statement, it leaves me feeling like I want a bit more information. Who are these teens? Why are their families rivals? Why doesn’t it go well?

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