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Back in his small hometown, a famous psychiatrist turned writer has to challenge his beliefs and rationality while struggling with his past demons when he's asked to work with a patient and his long lost friend, Tracy who's charged with murder but claims that her friend time-traveled.
Ya looking at it now, I do agree that it's a mouthful. Will post a new logline today. Thanks for replying.
Ya looking at it now, I do agree that it’s a mouthful. Will post a new logline today. Thanks for replying.
See lessFormer high school Ms. Popular, Sophie, is now the mother of an autistic child. Her life's ambitions are now different and she is burdened by a misplaced sense of regret. Tonight she is on her way to her high school reunion to face her former classmates. The night turns out to be a difficult one, where her moral standards are challenged.
You have all the elements in here that are needed, and then some more. I think it will be best if you take out the lines "her's life's ambitions are now different...regret" and "night turns out to be difficult... are challenged." You can use some of that in a single word if you want to. For instanceRead more
You have all the elements in here that are needed, and then some more. I think it will be best if you take out the lines “her’s life’s ambitions are now different…regret” and “night turns out to be difficult… are challenged.” You can use some of that in a single word if you want to. For instance:
Former high school Ms. Popular, Sophie who’s now a mother of an autistic child is on her way to her high school reunion to face her former classmates only to find a difficult night of moral judgements up ahead.
This is over the top of my head so I’m sure you can come up with something better.
See lessThe concept is good, but this is highly execution dependent so the one page synopsis is as important as the logline. I’d start working on that as well.
Good luck.
70,000 years ago a young female hunter is elected to lead her tribe out of Africa. Death, starvation, wild animals and other humans all stand between them and the arc of history.
Wow this has the power to be an epic film. And given the current trend, having a strong female protagonist is an add on. Currently your logline brings across the world of this story quite well. The challenge for you is to flesh out the people of the world starting with the protagonist. Is it a normRead more
Wow this has the power to be an epic film. And given the current trend, having a strong female protagonist is an add on.
Currently your logline brings across the world of this story quite well. The challenge for you is to flesh out the people of the world starting with the protagonist. Is it a norm to have a female leader during that time? Or is the protagonist an exception. Is she strong but temperamental? Is she cunning and brutal when it comes to doing the right thing? Give us her personality in two words, if possible.
What will happen if she isn’t successful in leading them to safety (stakes). Another thing that needs clarification is why is this relevant to the ark of history? Are they the last known group of human inhabitants or something else? If so you need to put that in the logline.
As mentioned above, it helps if you give an idea of how the protagonist is strong yet flawed for this task. Because that’s what gets the reader hooked to the logline- the internal bet that the reader places on the outcome.
For instance, if you say she’s strong but manipulative- it means that at one point she will lead her group to safety by lying to them which will get her in trouble and raise the question of morality. This way you don’t need to say any of that in the logline but by the use of the word manipulative, you drive the reader to fill in the blanks. Just my 2 cents.
Good luck.
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