1. Posted: July 13, 2012In:

    When three bungling thieves manage to steal a gold bar, they think all their troubles are over. They were wrong.

    curleysound

    Thanks for the helpful comments! The gold bar in question is a "Good Delivery" bar http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Good_Delivery They weigh about 28 pounds (400 ounces) and are worth upwards of $500,000US. The biggest problem is they are hard to fence, and thusly, hilarity ensues. Also, the cops, and tRead more

    Thanks for the helpful comments! The gold bar in question is a “Good Delivery” bar http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Good_Delivery

    They weigh about 28 pounds (400 ounces) and are worth upwards of $500,000US. The biggest problem is they are hard to fence, and thusly, hilarity ensues. Also, the cops, and the owner of the gold bar are looking for them too.

    I tried to keep it short and sweet. High concept.

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  2. Posted: July 13, 2012In:

    When he is rejected by the girl of his dreams, a teenager by the name of Tom Weldon must deal with the depression that follows, and the taunts of the asshole who beat her him to her.

    curleysound

    Two things, I suppose there aren't any rules about vulgarity, but the use of the A-hole word is not necessary, and might turn off a potential investor. Second, the six words after A-hole don't make any sense. Maybe take out the first "her" so it says "who beat him to her"

    Two things, I suppose there aren’t any rules about vulgarity, but the use of the A-hole word is not necessary, and might turn off a potential investor. Second, the six words after A-hole don’t make any sense. Maybe take out the first “her” so it says “who beat him to her”

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