1. Posted: August 7, 2017In:

    After being a result of a failed superhuman strength enhancing experimentation. A young boy must find a way to escape and run away from his oppressive family of assassins in order to achieve his dream of living like an ordinary human being.

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    I'm guessing him escaping or realising that his family are bad guys is his inciting incident, as?his being born probably can't be.

    I’m guessing him escaping or realising that his family are bad guys is his inciting incident, as?his being born probably can’t be.

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  2. Posted: August 6, 2017In:

    A workaholic midwife becomes pregnant with twins after a drunken one night stand and with the help of her friends adjusts to her new life as a mother.

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    Is the inciting incident the discovery of the pregnancy or the birth/ongoing motherhood? It's hard to suddenly land in motherhood, unless her sister dies and she has to raise an already-born baby?

    Is the inciting incident the discovery of the pregnancy or the birth/ongoing motherhood? It’s hard to suddenly land in motherhood, unless her sister dies and she has to raise an already-born baby?

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  3. Posted: August 4, 2017In:

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    If you want it to be a comedy, why not have the protagonist by majorly unhealthy and has a heart attack and the girls are not only the victims of the serial killer, but as a final humiliation their?organs are harvested to ?keep alive a chain-smoking fry-cook. The girls can't move onto the other sideRead more

    If you want it to be a comedy, why not have the protagonist by majorly unhealthy and has a heart attack and the girls are not only the victims of the serial killer, but as a final humiliation their?organs are harvested to ?keep alive a chain-smoking fry-cook. The girls can’t move onto the other side until the unwilling fry cook helps them track down the serial killer.

    Tormented?by the ghosts?of the girl who’s transplanted heart?saved him, a greasy?fry-cook must track down her serial killer so she can?cross over.

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