1. Posted: April 28, 2015In:

    Updated: The editor of a newspaper in a small city begins printing fanciful stories to sell more papers; in the process, she stumbles on to a genuine corruption scandal with national implications.

    Dave Bloustien Penpusher

    Yeah, I wondered about that - salacious gossip. Living in Sydney but coming from Adelaide, I was actually thinking of a place the size of Newcastle or Bendigo. Not really 'small towns'; large enough to be anonymous but small enough for the story to work.

    Yeah, I wondered about that – salacious gossip. Living in Sydney but coming from Adelaide, I was actually thinking of a place the size of Newcastle or Bendigo. Not really ‘small towns’; large enough to be anonymous but small enough for the story to work.

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  2. Posted: April 28, 2015In:

    updated: In a world of high fantasy, four archetypical adventurers have a brush with death only to learn their fates are determined by a ?role playing game?; they journey into our world, where the laws they know no longer apply, to meet the godlike beings who control them (comedy).

    Dave Bloustien Penpusher

    Yeah, I think the word 'must' is confusing.

    Yeah, I think the word ‘must’ is confusing.

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  3. Posted: April 23, 2015In:

    Reluctantly elected as president, a lazy teenager struggles to run the model train club, but soon discovers opportunities to expand his earnings and popularity through increasingly unscrupulous business practices.

    Dave Bloustien Penpusher

    Yes, I agree with these comments. I think it's a really compelling premise, but there are a couple of logical inconsistencies about the protagonist's character. Maybe rather than 'struggles', it should be 'is forced to'?

    Yes, I agree with these comments. I think it’s a really compelling premise, but there are a couple of logical inconsistencies about the protagonist’s character. Maybe rather than ‘struggles’, it should be ‘is forced to’?

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