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When a young computer prodigy discovers he exists in a virtual world, he reprograms reality to save his father with cataclysmic consequences.
From reading your comment I feel like the original logline almost has 2 inciting incidents. It seems that the reprogramming of reality should be the inciting incident which leads to the goal of trying to fix what went wrong and save their reality.
From reading your comment I feel like the original logline almost has 2 inciting incidents.
See lessIt seems that the reprogramming of reality should be the inciting incident which leads to the goal of trying to fix what went wrong and save their reality.
A world class triathlon athlete competes in a town where he was a torturer in his former life. Karma catches up, not only with him, but his whole team.
The second half of your logline reads more like a retrospective tagline. Try something that links in the main character and his goal better. eg: When a world class triathlon athlete's career brings him back to the town he committed heinous crimes in he must fight to avoid the consequences of his misRead more
The second half of your logline reads more like a retrospective tagline. Try something that links in the main character and his goal better.
See lesseg: When a world class triathlon athlete’s career brings him back to the town he committed heinous crimes in he must fight to avoid the consequences of his mispent youth.
A directionless raft guide enlists his professional athlete friends to help him find a mysterious woman in the forest who called upon him to save her, then disappeared.
I feel like your logline might read a bit better if you reverse the order things are told in. For example when a distressed woman disappears into the forest a directionless raft guide must enlist his athlete friends to find her. At the moment it reads a bit like the movie starts after he has alreadyRead more
I feel like your logline might read a bit better if you reverse the order things are told in. For example when a distressed woman disappears into the forest a directionless raft guide must enlist his athlete friends to find her.
At the moment it reads a bit like the movie starts after he has already seen her and enlisting the friends is the inciting incident.
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