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A troubled male escort arrives at the plush apartment of a large media company CEO for the afternoon, but when her past secrets are revealed neither of them will be the same afterward
*LESS detail about the room and setting, and MORE about the characters and the events.
*LESS detail about the room and setting, and MORE about the characters and the events.
See lessA troubled male escort arrives at the plush apartment of a large media company CEO for the afternoon, but when her past secrets are revealed neither of them will be the same afterward
A logline isn't meant to be a 'teaser' of the movie. It should be a succinct but complete overview of the movie. Therefore I think we need more and less detail in there. Less detail about the room and the events. In what way is escort 'troubled' we don't need to know about the plush apartment, or thRead more
A logline isn’t meant to be a ‘teaser’ of the movie. It should be a succinct but complete overview of the movie. Therefore I think we need more and less detail in there.
Less detail about the room and the events.
In what way is escort ‘troubled’
we don’t need to know about the plush apartment, or that it’s afternoon.
We also probably don’t need to know the genders of the protagonists. You can possibly allude to them using pronouns.
“When an xxxx escort is hired by a powerful media exec, XXXX occurs unearthing secrets she would have preferred remain hidden. Now to (survive/win/reclaim their lives) they must XXXXX and overcome XXXX which threatens to XXXXXX”
Now we know who the protagonists are, what their problem is, what the stakes are, and how they must evolve in order to triumph.
See lessA woman, who can predict whether couples are in love, wants her old life back after well-intentioned friends turn her into an internet sensation, and she loses her magic touch and is outed as a fraud.
Perhaps more detail? Odie, your proposed version has removed critical details. From your amendment, we must now ask: Is the protagonist's problem with one of hubris/humility? is she an attention seeker who forced herself into the limelight and is now paying the price? Is her gift real? is this a supRead more
Perhaps more detail?
Odie, your proposed version has removed critical details. From your amendment, we must now ask: Is the protagonist’s problem with one of hubris/humility? is she an attention seeker who forced herself into the limelight and is now paying the price?
Is her gift real? is this a supernatural story? or is discovering whether or not it is real the point? Or is her problem that has now realised that her ‘power’ never existed and she has lost a sense of her own life’s purpose?
The OP logline addresses what the protagonist WANTS, (to return to stasis) but that isn’t what she NEEDS. This is what the movie is really about.
The movie begins with the Thesis (her stable life with her little ability)… then we are thrown into ANTITHESIS when she’s thrust into the limelight… here she must discover what she NEEDS in order to achieve SYNTHESIS in the third act.
What is the movie actually about? What is the Synthesis that the protagonist needs to achieve?
Does she need to regain her power (if her power was real)?
Does she need to accept the reality that she was always a fake, and now needs to atone or find a new purpose in life?
Does she have a real talent that has simply been suppressed/lost due to a lack of confidence?
Regardless of whether or not this is actually a supernatural story, it kinda feels like this film fits into the “Superhero” genre.
thats a few of my thoughts.
GOOD LUCK!
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