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In a world where most jobs have been taken over by AI’s, a drug addicted private investigator is hired to help an android detective solve a murder case that threatens the very foundations of society.
While you say that this case threatens the foundations of society, which are stakes, what does the P.I have interest in it for? The last part raises more questions than it should, because ?it is impersonal and nonspecific. What are the stakes? Does this case somehow lead to a group that is planningRead more
While you say that this case threatens the foundations of society, which are stakes, what does the P.I have interest in it for? The last part raises more questions than it should, because ?it is impersonal and nonspecific. What are the stakes? Does this case somehow lead to a group that is planning to shut down the AIs society is so dependent on, and they murdered someone to cover it up? Be more specific. While technically the MC being hired is an inciting incident, I think describing the murder would be more effective. Also, I think the first part can go, because you mention androids later and it is just extra exposition.
See lessSo my suggestion is: When someone(are they an important person? Why does this murder drive the MC to take this case?) is murdered, an addict P.I (what makes them so special? Are they on Holmes level of investigation? Why the MC and not a police detective?) is hired to help an android solve the case. (Then if you choose you could add the catastrophic event that would happen if this ?case were not solved. )
Remember, aim for less than 30 words.