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A na?ve new prison psychiatrist takes it upon herself to fight for the rights of an aging hit-man kept in solitary confinement, but when her husband is kidnapped, he?s the only one she can turn to for help.
Paul, I would watch this movie. But from your log line I don't see the inherit conflict between the hit man and the psychiatrist. How are they at odds to help each other? Of course the he would want to help her, quid pro quo, right? Speaking of which, it has some flavor of Claris Starling, HannibalRead more
Paul,
See lessI would watch this movie. But from your log line I don’t see the inherit conflict between the hit man and the psychiatrist. How are they at odds to help each other? Of course the he would want to help her, quid pro quo, right? Speaking of which, it has some flavor of Claris Starling, Hannibal Lecter and the plot of Silence of the Lambs. Does her fighting for his rights just establish their relationship or is it integral to the rest of the plot? If it’s establishing, then maybe it doesn’t need to be here? Is the husband’s kidnapping a first act development? Then you might consider starting with the inciting incident. Something like “When the husband of a naive new prison psychiatrist is kidnapped the only one who can help is a bitter, aging hit man in solitary confinement.” Here you have maximum contrast between the two characters who must work together. I mean, if they don’t work together, then you have no movie, right?
Hope this helps,
Doc
A man on his death bed dreams of a love through the ages with a woman who promises him everlasting love.
Paul, Thanks for your comments. You are right, it's just an idea, but that's by design. I forgot to mention that it's a short script. A tone poem. The story is a elegiacal meditation on love unbounded through time. He must learn to let go of love in this lifetime so that he can move on, and she offeRead more
Paul, Thanks for your comments. You are right, it’s just an idea, but that’s by design. I forgot to mention that it’s a short script. A tone poem.
The story is a elegiacal meditation on love unbounded through time. He must learn to let go of love in this lifetime so that he can move on, and she offers him the promise that the love will always be there.
Let me try again addressing his intention, “Through dreams of a timeless love, a desperate man on his death bed learns to let go of fear.”
or maybe a different, more conceptual tack: “As a man lay dying, it’s not just this life that passes before his eyes, but that of several lifetimes shared with one woman.”
I think I’m having a block with this because I have too many of the big concepts stuck in my head.
Thanks,
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