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When his arm gets trapped under a giant rock in the Grand Canyon, a man must decide how much he values his own life and how far he will go to preserve it.
127 Hours (2010). The movie was based upon a real life incident. Noting that in the logline strengthens the hook of the logline. The hook of the logline is that it's a true story of a man who faces an awful dilemma: he must cut off his arm -- or die. It's a do or die plot predicament -- and that's wRead more
127 Hours (2010). The movie was based upon a real life incident. Noting that in the logline strengthens the hook of the logline.
The hook of the logline is that it’s a true story of a man who faces an awful dilemma: he must cut off his arm — or die. It’s a do or die plot predicament — and that’s what the logline should focus on. That predicament was the story hook that attracted the interest of acclaimed director Danny Boyle.
So, maybe:
The true life story of a mountain climber who, when his hand gets trapped under a boulder in a remote canyon, must cut it off or die.
(27 words versus 33 words for the logline posted. With loglines, less is more.)
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A doctor deliberately misdiagnoses a man's illness to guarantee his death after falling in love with the man's wife. (19 words) (With the exception of historical dramas, the general rule is to not tag a protagonist with a specific name. Rather identify him by his role in the plot.)
A doctor deliberately misdiagnoses a man’s illness to guarantee his death after falling in love with the man’s wife. (19 words)
(With the exception of historical dramas, the general rule is to not tag a protagonist with a specific name. Rather identify him by his role in the plot.)
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A logline is a *short* statement about the plot. That is, a character's struggle to acheive *specific*, *concrete* goal. This logline hints action having to do with fulfilling a promise -- but we haven't a clue what the promise is. We don't know what *specifically* is her objective goal. And not knoRead more
A logline is a *short* statement about the plot. That is, a character’s struggle to acheive *specific*, *concrete* goal. This logline hints action having to do with fulfilling a promise — but we haven’t a clue what the promise is. We don’t know what *specifically* is her objective goal. And not knowing what the goal is we don’t know whether it might be worth a producer’s time to read the script, worth a director’s time to make the movie, worth an audience’s time to watch it.
Be specific.
>>almost costs her her lifelong dream of getting married and having a family of her own.
This seems to give away the ending, something a logline should never do.
Finally, the logline is 52 words long. Ideally, a logline should come in under 25 words in length.
For loglines, less is more.
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