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Due to IVF and genetic changes humanity only exist in the future as twins or multiple births. A self-proclaimed leader decides that the natural balance has to be restored by what he calls natural selection. The tormented genius ?Daggy? Pollux fights against the execution of his love interest who’s been selected as the weaker one.
>>but that would make people think of the hunger games. What distinguishes this from the "Hunger Games".? What is the m.o. by which losers are chosen to die? >>his love interest who?s been selected as the weaker one. This seems to deflect the real central conflict of the story:? twins foRead more
>>but that would make people think of the hunger games.
What distinguishes this from the “Hunger Games”.? What is the m.o. by which losers are chosen to die?
>>his love interest who?s been selected as the weaker one.
This seems to deflect the real central conflict of the story:? twins forced to compete against each other. Katniss Everdeen is another character’s love interest.? But that is a complication, not the central conflict that drives the story.
What is the central conflict that drives your story?
See lessA bounty hunter and a renegade race against the power-hungry to find an utopia lost in time.
>>An avaricious bounty hunter is forced to learn generosityLoglines are not about characters arcs, what they must learn -- subjective issues.? Loglines are about character action, what they must do -- objective issues.(Although in the course of doing, they must also learn -- but that's for theRead more
>>An avaricious bounty hunter is forced to learn generosity
Loglines are not about characters arcs, what they must learn — subjective issues.? Loglines are about character action, what they must do — objective issues.
(Although in the course of doing, they must also learn — but that’s for the script as a whole.)
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Again, thanks for the clarification.I would point out that technically a utopia is not place. Rather it's an ideal society.? Which is why you've had me scratching my head trying to figure out what this objective goal/place is.It seems to me that what you envision is similar to the sacred locations (Read more
Again, thanks for the clarification.
I would point out that technically a utopia is not place. Rather it’s an ideal society.? Which is why you’ve had me scratching my head trying to figure out what this objective goal/place is.
It seems to me that what you envision is similar to the sacred locations (groves, isles, temples, etc.) in mythology and religion. Where a person could find safety and sustenance, refuge and redemption.
In the “Wizard of Oz” the Emerald City is a utopian society.? But it doesn’t grant wishes.? ?The person who presides over that utopian city does, the Wizard. In “Aladdin”, the lamp is only magical because of what it contains:? a wish granting genie.
My point is it seems to me your wish-granting-whatever needs personification, some anthropomorphic personality whom your protagonist can and must interact with.
>>>I?ve always felt that a magic lamp/well/spring/stone or anything like that feels a bit eh and generic.
Okay.? But tried and true dramatic props are things people can immediately understand and accept.? Also, the fact that these props are so tried and true indicates they are linked to archetypes, images and motifs of the collective human psyche.? ?And as the depth psychologist C.G. Jung said, he who speaks in archetypal imagery speaks — sings with enchantment and power in a chorus of a 1,000 voices.
What archetypal imagery is your “utopia” singing with?
fwiw
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