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After rescuing a baby found outside of her family’s cabin,? an apathetic teen must shelter him from the approaching blizzard and fend off relentless attacks from his monstrous, “Parent,” until the storm passes.
I am unapathetic about the use of the term "apathetic".I suggest that in a logline when a character is tagged with a character flaw, it should be a flaw that will handicap his ability to succeed, that should plague him until at least the 3rd Act.So taking this logline at face value, the kid is goingRead more
I am unapathetic about the use of the term “apathetic”.
I suggest that in a logline when a character is tagged with a character flaw, it should be a flaw that will handicap his ability to succeed, that should plague him until at least the 3rd Act.
So taking this logline at face value, the kid is going to rescue a baby — but remain apathetic, “whatever man”. There’s an approaching blizzard — but he? so what? He remains apathetic about it.? He must fend off numerous attacks from some kind of monstrous “parent” — but, hey, he’s not just cool and calm about the attacks, he doesn’t give a damn, he remains apathetic.
That just doesn’t isn’t credible and I’m guessing that isn’t your intention.? But I can’t read your mind; I can only read the words in the logline.
I suggest tagging him with a character flaw that will handicap him up until at least the 3rd Act.? A flaw that he must come to realize and overcome in order to prevail.? Not a transient flaw that will evaporate as soon as the plot kicks into 2nd gear.
Take Rick in “Casablanca”.? In Act 1 he declares the doesn’t stick his neck out for anyone. Does he drop that attitude as soon as Elsa appears in his gin joint toward the end of Act 1?? Begin to stick his neck out for others or for a great cause?
No.?
He digs in, refuses to help her and her husband get the letters of transit they need to flee the Nazis.? He doesn’t stick his neck out until the 3rd Act.
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See lessWhen his big brother goes missing in the wilderness, an anxious high-school senior heads into the wild to find him? accompanied by his brother?s ghost
When does the ghost appear?? Is it the inciting incident that sends the protagonist in search of the body of his brother. (A ghost suggests his brother is dead.)? Or is it a manifestation that occurs after he has commenced his search? And I am kind of dubious about the character tag of "stammering".Read more
When does the ghost appear?? Is it the inciting incident that sends the protagonist in search of the body of his brother. (A ghost suggests his brother is dead.)? Or is it a manifestation that occurs after he has commenced his search?
And I am kind of dubious about the character tag of “stammering”.? I subscribe to the notion that a character should be described in terms of a flaw that either threatens to defeat him or a strength that he will need to succeed.? Stammering doesn’t seem to fit either criterion.
And if he’s tramping through the wild looking of his brother,who does he have with to talk to,? hence stammer?? It seems to be extraneous to the plot one way or the other.
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See lessOnce an insecure sexy convict starts dating a professional boxer, that gives her the world and change her for the better she never expected. A childhood friend tracks her down in order to confess love for her, and she is left with a torn decision choosing between a long time friend and the man of her dreams. Les Be Honest Don’t know if better, I’ll keep trying. However, seems a bit generic aye? not interesting enough i think.
Agree with mikepedley85.? Particularly in? characterizing the protagonist as "sexy".? In the #MeToo era that just won't fly.? In a logline the protagonist should be defined in terms of either a character strength or a character weakness.
Agree with mikepedley85.? Particularly in? characterizing the protagonist as “sexy”.? In the #MeToo era that just won’t fly.? In a logline the protagonist should be defined in terms of either a character strength or a character weakness.
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