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In the final moments before facing the firing squad, the charismatic leader of a murderous robbery gang makes one last request: to have her confession heard by the priest who was once her lover.
Frankly, I think the conventions of loglines -- such as the requirement to distill the concept down to (ideally) 30 words or so, to focus on the objective goal, disregard subjective issues -- are rather arbitrary and downright frustrating. But those conventions reflect the nature of the business. ThRead more
Frankly, I think the conventions of loglines — such as the requirement to distill the concept down to (ideally) 30 words or so, to focus on the objective goal, disregard subjective issues — are rather arbitrary and downright frustrating. But those conventions reflect the nature of the business. The people who can green light a project are extremely busy, have short attention spans. We have but a few precious seconds to hit them with our concepts and hook their interest. I can rail against the facts of the business all I want, but my opinion doesn’t count.
If you think you can defy the [expletive deleted] conventions and sell your script, more power to you.
See lessIn the final moments before facing the firing squad, the charismatic leader of a murderous robbery gang makes one last request: to have her confession heard by the priest who was once her lover.
Frankly, I think the conventions of loglines -- such as the requirement to distill the concept down to (ideally) 30 words or so, to focus on the objective goal, disregard subjective issues -- are rather arbitrary and downright frustrating. But those conventions reflect the nature of the business. ThRead more
Frankly, I think the conventions of loglines — such as the requirement to distill the concept down to (ideally) 30 words or so, to focus on the objective goal, disregard subjective issues — are rather arbitrary and downright frustrating. But those conventions reflect the nature of the business. The people who can green light a project are extremely busy, have short attention spans. We have but a few precious seconds to hit them with our concepts and hook their interest. I can rail against the facts of the business all I want, but my opinion doesn’t count.
If you think you can defy the [expletive deleted] conventions and sell your script, more power to you.
See lessIn the final moments before facing the firing squad, the charismatic leader of a murderous robbery gang makes one last request: to have her confession heard by the priest who was once her lover.
Okay. Salieri's confession is a framing device to tell the story of Mozart who is clearly the protagonist. And Salieri is clearly the antagonist (and pov narrator). Who are assigned those roles in your story? In "Amadeus", the priest is a mere mediocrity in his profession (as Salieri is in his). He'Read more
Okay.
Salieri’s confession is a framing device to tell the story of Mozart who is clearly the protagonist. And Salieri is clearly the antagonist (and pov narrator). Who are assigned those roles in your story?
In “Amadeus”, the priest is a mere mediocrity in his profession (as Salieri is in his). He’s a character used to set up the dramatic exploration of some heavy weight artistic and theological questions, about the nature of genius, the justice and equity of deity.
In the 7th minute of the film, Salieri asks:
SALIERI: Do you know who I am?
PRIEST: It makes no difference. All men are equal in God’s eyes.
SALIERI: Are they?
That is the dramatic question the rest of the film explores.
(Also the movie was an adaptation of a wildly successful stage play. IOW: the premise was pre-sold, a proven winner. And then there’s the sin qua non icing on the cake: Wolfie Mozart’s divine music. Does your story have any of those elements to pre-sell it?)
It seems to me that for the purpose of the logline, your concept has got to do more than indicate that it mimics the structure of “Amadeus”. It think it needs a tighter, a more specific focus. “Reflecting on the past” seems too general. That may be the meat of the story, but it seems to me that the SIZZLE is how 2 lives passionately intersected and then wildly diverged.
And loglines are about selling sizzle, not meat.
fwiw.
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